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Don't look at me
When I fall apart
I don't want you
To hear my cries
I will always push away
The ones who say they care
It's just sorrow and shame
They care only about themselves
It's just their morality
That makes them pretend

They never look in my eyes
Too afraid of what they might see
Of the empty stare
That won't go away
Scared of the darkness
Of the soulless face
And the hint of a murder
That is always there
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~sayraparker Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome. Well done!
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*lZephyrus Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The words you used there are simply attracting the eyes to read through the rest, good job
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:icondbutterfly1969:
thank you. it was actually my first poem ever, i'm glad you like it
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~Eevee1999 Feb 14, 2013  Student General Artist
Wow! I just couldn't pull my eyes away, and I sort of felt bad for the narrator! Great job!
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~oneofakindwriter Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
this poem drew me in i had to read it twice fantastic
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:icondbutterfly1969:
thank you. it's nice to know it works like that, because i really wanted it to draw the reader in.
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~oneofakindwriter Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
well done you did so which is very difficult for most people's work to speak to me because i am extremely picky i suppose so very impressed with your work :)
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~Suphyx Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Pain and rage. I like this.
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~sarwansingh Feb 8, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
nice !!!
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