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There's a place where even evil ones fear to tread
There are infant's bodies buried beneath damp earth
And full of pedophiles  shallow mass grave
So that the crows can take out their eyes
They are not dead yet, they shall suffer for years

Do you know that smell?
Yes, that's a one you can't mistake
Sweet and sour, drilling into your brain
It's a smell of decomposing corpses
One you will never forget

And the sight, dark and rotten,
A world that has decayed
There are bone trees with leafs of flesh
With petty little thieves sitting beneath them
Eyes bulging out, scared of that place

It's the graveyard of the murdered
Of deserved death
There's a place which carries a threat
A place in which you don't want to ever step
That place is in my head
:icondbutterfly1969:
i can see it when i close my eyes
some say i'm insane
but i think i'm really brave
not begging for help
facing it every day
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Mood: Artistic ~Farathil 5 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
Hmm, I'm conflicted.
I like most of the poem except for the first stanza.
I'm not sure it's not exactly "fluid" as the rest of the poem.
I love the rest of the poem though creepy yet emotion evoking (other than the goosebumps feeling)
I know it's free verse :P but i'm giving you 9.5/10 imagery was very overwhelming in a good way.
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~purplespider881 May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I adore the way you explain how it looks, how it smells, how it feels. I can make poems, but you can't really "live in it" if you know what I mean. You actually make me smell the rotten stink of suffering, half dead bodies. You know that's one of the most important things when making a poem? Only good people can do that, and not me. Keep up the good work.
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:icondbutterfly1969:
thank you for the comment :) i'm glad i managed to make you feel that way...

i think that if you try hard enough and put a lot of effort into it your poetry can get as good as possible :) don't be ever put off if something goes wrong, just try again and again and someday you will be vary proud of yourself
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Mood: Affection ~purplespider881 May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
When I'm low I always go thinking like "I'm not good enough, people won't like me" etcetera. Maybe I'll need to write something about that.
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:icondbutterfly1969:
that would be a great start :) don't ever think that you are not good enough or anything like that. you are who you want to be and the most important thing is for you to be happy, so believe in yourself!
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~purplespider881 May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yeah, just forget that sometimes. Sigh.
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:iconlord-of-justice:
*LORD-OF-JUSTICE May 4, 2013  Student Writer
There is a place where no one isn't afraid, but not everyone let's it stop them
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:icondbutterfly1969:
the most important thing is to keep going no matter what :)
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*LORD-OF-JUSTICE May 4, 2013  Student Writer
Damn straight
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~suki42deathlake Mar 5, 2013   General Artist
lovely imagery ^^
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